Merge pull request #3 from catblade/updates_proposed

Propose changes according to suggestions.

Author: catblade

tags/environmentalsustainability.md

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 ## Introduction
 
-The Paris Climate Accords outline the link between economic activity, greenhouse gas (GHG) emissions, and the impacts of climate change. GHG  emissions, primarily made from Carbon Dioxide, are released during the combustion of fossil fuels to produce electricity. To reach net zero goals, we need to identify how to reduce the environmental footprints of increasingly large data centers.
+The Paris Climate Accords outline the link between economic activity, greenhouse gas (GHG) emissions, and the impacts of climate change. GHG  emissions, primarily made from Carbon Dioxide, are released during the combustion of fossil fuels to produce electricity. To reach net zero goals, we will first identify how to reduce the environmental footprints of increasingly large data centers and then help the community take action to mitigate these footprints.
 
-## Mission Statement
-This TAG's goal is to advocate for, develop, support, and help evaluate environmental sustainability initiatives in Cloud Native Technologies.
+References:
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+* https://www.iea.org/reports/net-zero-by-2050
+* https://www.whitehouse.gov/wp-content/uploads/2021/10/US-Long-Term-Strategy.pdf
+* https://www.worldbank.org/en/news/feature/2022/05/23/what-you-need-to-know-about-net-zero
 
-All activities of this TAG should aim to positively impact the community by changing mindset, increasing resource efficiency, and putting energy efficiency and environmental sustainability on everyone's agenda.
+## Mission Statement
+This TAG's goal is to advocate for, develop, support, and help evaluate environmental sustainability initiatives in Cloud Native Technologies.  This TAG will identify values and possible incentives for service providers to reduce their consumption and carbon footprint through cloud native tooling.
 
 ## Responsibilities & Deliverables
 
 ### Background
 We recognize that: 
-- balancing resource consumption with the desire for performance is difficult
-- there is inconsistency in how emissions are calculated and what is included by software in scopes of emission. 
+- the trade off between reducing resource consumption and higher performance is hard to balance
+- there is a lack of well supported and documented approaches for evaluating cloud native projects in their default or optimized configurations
 
 ### In-Scope
 
 - Identify, define, and develop tooling to assess and improve environmental sustainability approaches, including
-    - quantification of energy consumption of full-stack software including application, cloud native services
-    - recommendations to manage full-stack software such that the overall energy consumption and associated carbon are reduced.
-    - items to evaluate technological and architectural health of projects
+    - Quantify the energy consumption of cloud native implementations individually as well as in common integration patterns.
+    - Recommendations and strategies to develop, package, distribute, deploy, and operate cloud native implementations to reduce energy consumption and carbon as well as the various environments they operate in and which impact their consumption
+    - Capabilities, benchmarks, and processes to evaluate technological and architectural health of projects
 - Community outreach on any items within scope, for instance, social media/conferences/podcasts/meetups et cetera
 - Collaboration with other sustainability efforts
 
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 - Focus outside of Cloud Native Technologies, according to the [CNCF Cloud Native definition](https://github.com/cncf/toc/blob/main/DEFINITION.md)
 
 ## Deliverables to ToC
-- landscape for the carbon and energy metrics/measurements/management savings
-- recommendations for new CNCF projects where there are clear use cases or where exploration is needed
-- regular reporting to ToC on ongoing and completed work
-- recommend projects for sandbox and graduation status
-- suggestions for improvements for CNCF internal processes, for example, education for sustainability
+- Landscape for carbon and energy efficiency in the form of metrics, measurements, and management techniques
+- Environmental sustainability recommendations and optimizations to new and existing projects within the landscape
+- Reports on gaps in the environmental sustainability coverage of the landscape
+- Reviews, inputs, and recommendations for proposed projects for CNCF hosting and advancement
+- Suggestions for improvements for CNCF internal processes, for example, education for sustainability
 
 ## Audiences
 
 - Education - audience is end users, developers, stakeholders
-- Project intelligence - audience is TOC / TOC Community
+- Project intelligence - audience is TOC/CNCF Community
 - External collaboration - organizations with the same mindset
 
 #### Operations
 
 Environmental Sustainability TAG operations are consistent with standard TAG operating guidelines provided by the [CNCF Technical Oversight Committee TOC](https://github.com/cncf/toc).
 
-## Acknowledgement
-The format of this proposal is inspired from [TAG security](https://github.com/cncf/tag-security/blob/main/governance/charter.md#operations).
-The initial doc was taken from the [Environmental WG charter](https://docs.google.com/document/d/1JaF7lSUmLQ2zmScmca6UF7PgbjMzSxjhhjx2LThThaY/edit#heading=h.x77xxicolnig) and modified by the community.
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-## Contributors
-This proposal is contributed by (in alphabetical order):
-- Cara Delia
-- Chen Wang
-- Debra Bernstein
-- Eun Kyung Lee
-- Fanjing Meng
-- Frederick F. Kautz IV
-- Huamin Chen
-- Jiaju Zhang
-- Jochen Joswig
-- Jorge Palma
-- Leonard Pahlke
-- Mark Butcher
-- Marlow Weston
-- Max Körbächer
-- Niki Manoledaki
-- Parul Singh
-- Scott Rigby
-- Tony Mongkolsmai
-- William Caban
-- Wojtek Cichoń
-- Yassine El Ghali
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